9 thoughts on “Time Well Spent (Blog or Die! Entry #13)

  1. That’s pretty cute. I find it bizarre how discrete those categories can be. How did we get space vs castle, of all things? It makes me scratch my head in wonder, but the comparison is quite accurate. Nice comic! I feel like I’ll be sending this link to other people to help them understand.

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  2. I gotta say, the simplicity of this comic, combined with its “pretty much true-ness” makes it kind of exemplary for me.

    That simplicity is a powerful source of affiliation between reader and writer. After one quick read… The audiance recognizes truth, and internally “endorses” both the message and the author.

    Even a non-AFOL might get the gist. And of course rhyme is a universal appeal and almost always enhances comedy.

    Good solid stuff Lettus! Foundational. Comic bedrock.

    Attack!

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  3. You guys are off your game. Welcome to the blog Lettuce! Thanks for the entry and I really hope you stick around and join in on the conversation. The comments section could use an infusion of new blood, based on this post alone. I dig your entry and I’ll have a more complete review of it in the coming days.

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  4. Official Contest Review
    Entry # 13
    Title: Time Well Spent
    Author: Lettuce Brick
    Views: 90 Comments: 8

    Favorite Quote: “Spaceships are swooshed, choo-choos are not, and as for the castles, they stay in one spot.”

    Favorite Comment inspired by the entry: “That simplicity is a powerful source of affiliation between reader and writer. After one quick read… The audiance recognizes truth, and internally “endorses” both the message and the author.” – Rutherford

    Single Sentence Summary: A humorous and poetic take on the Lego community’s timeless self-divided nature.

    The Good:

    1. The poetry! We joke a great deal about verse around here but I found it’s inclusion into your entry to be very refreshing. As Rutherford mentions in the comment, a well crafted rhyme usually enhances comedic endeavors and that definitely applies here, the poem enhances the build and creates something unique in both the category and the contest as a whole.

    2. I really liked the consistency between frames, that each type of character basically uses the same tables and parts, driving home the notion that there are far more similarities than differences between builders. Our Legoratories in real life may differ in size and access to natural light, but the similarities outweigh the differences, so I like the fact that you kept the background the same while the builders changed. I also liked the way you gave each character a distinct prop to help depict the action, even when the action is something sedate like reading.

    3. Each quote was perfect, it would have been easy to screw that up and say too much or mess up the tone of each archetype. This whole comic is a study in simplicity and efficiency, and even if it doesn’t end up wining, you should know that it made the short list for final consideration. Bravo, the lack of comments does not reflect on the quality of the entry.

    The Bad:

    1. This is going to seem a little nitpicky but my devotion to the review format requires a certain level of fussiness in order to hit all the marks and provide each entrant with 3 points of criticism. That said, I kind of wish you’d made the torso of the third minifig visible to the audience. Each of the three characters gets a prop, and that’s cool, but I enjoyed seeing the outfit you selected for the first two and I wondered what the third guy had hidden behind the giant tome. A different hair style might have helped or maybe a hat of some sort to make the figure more iconic. Again, it’s a small complaint but it did stand out.

    2. I didn’t think the microspace builds were as interesting or as skillfully constructed as the train layout or castle diorama. The problem is made worse by the number of ships, which is probably one or two too many. The swooshing action is a little bit obscured by all the ships, and it should be a clear focal point. Speaking of the swoosh, putting that particular ship on an angle in the minifig’s hand might have been a more effective choice. It also seemed like the designs were a little repetitive, the ship the character is holding just looks like a smaller version of the big gray ship, and there is a similar relationship with the two ships laying flat on the table. Maybe that was intentional but it didn’t work for me because it was a tiny bit distracting. If you had extended the concept to the other two scenes it might have worked more effectively, with an even smaller castle and train.

    3. Speaking of the models, I think you might have used color a little more effectively. The castle layout is just about perfectly iconic, but both the spaceships and the trains might have benefitted by a greater variety of hues. Instead of brown train cars that match the color of the wooden table, maybe some red or orange might have made the build pop. I understand why you did the big spaceship in light gray, that’s definitely an accurate stereotype but using a more vibrant color scheme for the other ships might have helped provide some visual interest.

    The Whatever:
    You made my OCD tingle when you didn’t use grill tiles for the train tracks…were you trying to make my OCD tingle? Were you trying to be a contrarian? You seem like a nice person Mr. Lettuce, and I’ve never done anything bad to you…so why would you do that to me? Excuse me, I need to go take an extra dose of medication.

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